{"id":11660,"date":"2025-10-21T07:00:00","date_gmt":"2025-10-21T11:00:00","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/?p=11660"},"modified":"2025-10-20T17:03:00","modified_gmt":"2025-10-20T21:03:00","slug":"every-words-a-choice-part-9-have-some-style","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/?p=11660","title":{"rendered":"Every Word\u2019s a Choice \u2013 Part 9 \u2013 Have Some Style"},"content":{"rendered":"<div class=\"wp-block-image\">\n<figure class=\"alignleft size-full is-resized\"><img data-recalc-dims=\"1\" loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" width=\"584\" height=\"389\" src=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/style.jpg?resize=584%2C389&#038;ssl=1\" alt=\"\" class=\"wp-image-11661\" style=\"width:306px;height:auto\" srcset=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/style.jpg?w=960&amp;ssl=1 960w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/style.jpg?resize=300%2C200&amp;ssl=1 300w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/style.jpg?resize=150%2C100&amp;ssl=1 150w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/style.jpg?resize=450%2C300&amp;ssl=1 450w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 584px) 100vw, 584px\" \/><\/figure>\n<\/div>\n\n\n<p>To have a lasting impact on readers, your writing has to have some style. Style comes from your characters and their actions, the descriptions and dialog, that make them uniquely \u201cyours.\u201d It comes from your vocabulary, tone, point of view, rhythm, syntax. Some writers call this \u201cvoice.\u201d One of the main reasons readers develop favorites among the thousands of authors out there is because they like the author\u2019s voice. And creating a voice begins with the <strong>words you choose<\/strong>.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Once an author develops a truly distinctive voice, you recognize it. I\u2019ll bet you might recognize these distinctive literary voices, even with just a line or two.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><em>\u201cIt has long been an axiom of mine that the little things are infinitely the most important.\u201d<br>\u201cFrom 30 feet away she looked like a lot of class. From 10 feet away she looked like something made up to be seen from 30 feet away.\u201d<br>\u201cFolks like to talk about revenge like it\u2019s a righteous thing but it\u2019s just hate in a nicer suit.\u201d<br>\u201cAlways do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.\u201d<\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>You may have recognized the authors who chose those words: Arthur Conan Doyle for Sherlock Holmes, Raymond Chandler, SA Cosby, and Mark Twain.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Irony<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n<div class=\"wp-block-image\">\n<figure class=\"alignright size-full is-resized\"><img data-recalc-dims=\"1\" loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" width=\"404\" height=\"720\" src=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Irony.png?resize=404%2C720&#038;ssl=1\" alt=\"\" class=\"wp-image-11662\" style=\"width:259px;height:auto\" srcset=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Irony.png?w=404&amp;ssl=1 404w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Irony.png?resize=168%2C300&amp;ssl=1 168w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Irony.png?resize=84%2C150&amp;ssl=1 84w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 404px) 100vw, 404px\" \/><\/figure>\n<\/div>\n\n\n<p>For a great many stories set in our skeptical times, one aspect of voice that authors can make good use of is <strong>irony<\/strong>. Authors are using irony when they set up statements or situations that reveal a reality different from what appears to be true. Irony works when the reader already has expectations and understands the disparity between what \u201cshould\u201d be the case and what \u201cactually\u201d is<em>. <\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>It\u2019s why we joke about the labor-saving devices that are more trouble than they\u2019re worth, the customer service departments that give anything but.Or appreciate the humor in the accompanying cartoon. Or why we despair at politicians who espouse high-minded goals, then take actions that make them impossible to achieve.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>You might assume irony comes up only well into a story, when those expectations and realities are established, but here\u2019s a possible opening line for a romantic story that\u2019s dripping with irony: <em>I\u2019d been told my wedding day would be the happiest day of my life.<\/em> Uh-oh. Disaster on the horizon. It works because readers too have powerful expectations about wedding days.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><strong>Emotion<\/strong><\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Writer try to engage readers by evoking emotions. But how do we do that effectively? The song we used at the beginning of this series of posts is \u201c<a href=\"https:\/\/www.irishsongs.com\/lyrics.php?Action=view&amp;Song_id=27\">And the Band Played Waltzing Matilda<\/a>.\u201d If you remember it or read it again, you\u2019ll recognize that it is absolutely full of emotion. But how is that handled? Does the narrator ever say, \u201cI was <em>angry<\/em> with my short-sighted officers? I was <em>sad<\/em> my legs were gone?\u201d No, he says the heart-breaking \u201cNever knew there were worse things than dying.\u201d And the equally poignant: \u201cI thanked Christ there was nobody waiting for me.\u201d<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Good advice for writers is: \u201cnever name an emotion.\u201d When he was starting out, a friend who\u2019s a writer of stories with terrific plots had to learn how to write about emotion, ironically [!], by not writing about it. He would always over-explain. He would show an action, then tell his readers what it meant. He\u2019d name the emotion in sentences like:<em>\u201cShe threw the plate of spaghetti against the wall because she was so angry.\u201d <\/em>There\u2019s no need to say she was angry. It\u2019s obvious.<\/p>\n\n\n<div class=\"wp-block-image\">\n<figure class=\"alignleft size-full is-resized\"><img data-recalc-dims=\"1\" loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" width=\"480\" height=\"551\" src=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Reading.jpg?resize=480%2C551&#038;ssl=1\" alt=\"\" class=\"wp-image-11663\" style=\"width:247px;height:auto\" srcset=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Reading.jpg?w=480&amp;ssl=1 480w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Reading.jpg?resize=261%2C300&amp;ssl=1 261w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2025\/10\/Reading.jpg?resize=131%2C150&amp;ssl=1 131w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 480px) 100vw, 480px\" \/><\/figure>\n<\/div>\n\n\n<p>If you do a good job showing, the telling is unnecessary. If you\u2019ve used the strongest, most descriptive words to get to that point, your readers will understand the underlying emotion and only be annoyed if you also tell them.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>This brings up another important rule of thumb: \u201cTrust Your Reader.\u201d Savvy readers stay engaged if you leave them hanging a little, having to figure things out, rather than having events and reactions over-explained to them. Let them have the thrill of discovering the meaning behind your story.<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Next week: Last in this \u201cEvery Word\u2019s a Choice\u201d series: <strong>Dialog<\/strong><br>Previous blogs in the series are under the Writers\u2019 First Draft\u201d tab of my main webpage (vweisfeld dot com).<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>To have a lasting impact on readers, your writing has to have some style. Style comes from your characters and their actions, the descriptions and dialog, that make them uniquely \u201cyours.\u201d It comes from your vocabulary, tone, point of view, &hellip; <a href=\"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/?p=11660\">Continue reading <span class=\"meta-nav\">&rarr;<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"jetpack_post_was_ever_published":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_access":"","_jetpack_dont_email_post_to_subs":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_tier_id":0,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paywalled_content":false,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":true,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2}},"categories":[174,51,29],"tags":[2314,2313,2312],"class_list":["post-11660","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-first-draft-blog","category-words","category-writing","tag-emotion","tag-irony","tag-writers-voice"],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"jetpack_shortlink":"https:\/\/wp.me\/p2NkiT-324","_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/11660","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcomments&post=11660"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/11660\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":11664,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/11660\/revisions\/11664"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fmedia&parent=11660"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcategories&post=11660"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Ftags&post=11660"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}