{"id":5806,"date":"2016-06-24T07:48:59","date_gmt":"2016-06-24T11:48:59","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/?p=5806"},"modified":"2016-06-24T07:48:59","modified_gmt":"2016-06-24T11:48:59","slug":"hush-now-dont-explain","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/vweisfeld.com\/?p=5806","title":{"rendered":"&#8220;Hush Now, Don&#8217;t Explain&#8221;"},"content":{"rendered":"<div id=\"attachment_5809\" style=\"width: 243px\" class=\"wp-caption alignleft\"><a href=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/watch?v=XxwJ9lh-id4\"><img data-recalc-dims=\"1\" loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" aria-describedby=\"caption-attachment-5809\" class=\"wp-image-5809 size-medium\" src=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2016\/06\/Billie_Holiday_0001_original_converted-233x300.jpg?resize=233%2C300\" alt=\"Billie Holiday\" width=\"233\" height=\"300\" srcset=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2016\/06\/Billie_Holiday_0001_original_converted.jpg?resize=233%2C300&amp;ssl=1 233w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2016\/06\/Billie_Holiday_0001_original_converted.jpg?resize=116%2C150&amp;ssl=1 116w, https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/vweisfeld.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2016\/06\/Billie_Holiday_0001_original_converted.jpg?w=350&amp;ssl=1 350w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 233px) 100vw, 233px\" \/><\/a><p id=\"caption-attachment-5809\" class=\"wp-caption-text\">Click photo for &#8220;Hush Now, Don&#8217;t Explain&#8221;<\/p><\/div>\n<p>When I read a vivid description of a particular disease or condition, I confess I start feeling a slight pain in the target spot, an itch, a touch of malaise, a sink of nausea. (All the while being perfectly healthy.) Face it, lots of us suffer from&#8211;to put a positive spin on it&#8211;this kind of excessive empathy.<\/p>\n<p>That tendency seems remote kin to the feeling I have when I read &#8220;advice for writers.&#8221; No matter how awful the writing habit is, &#8220;I do that!&#8221; &#8220;My writing is full of it!&#8221; But when I ran across fiction editor <a href=\"http:\/\/theeditorsblog.net\/2015\/03\/03\/dont-explain-dont-explain-dont-explain\/\">Beth Hill&#8217;s terrific essay<\/a>, this time, I really, really think she&#8217;s diagnosed something important to me. Her brilliant Editor&#8217;s Blog essay is &#8220;Don&#8217;t Explain, Don&#8217;t Explain, Don&#8217;t Explain.&#8221; Let me explain.<\/p>\n<p>Hill says the problem of overexplaining comes up repeatedly in fiction manuscripts. Fundamentally, her common sense advice requires us, as authors, to <em>trust our readers<\/em> to understand what we&#8217;re writing about, without banging them over the head with a 2&#215;4 of explanation. Hill says:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Inherent in our characters and the events they experience are (or should be) the reasons they respond to situations as they do. If responses aren&#8217;t clear, fix the set-up or the characterizations, don&#8217;t take the easy way out and just <em>tell the reader<\/em> why they responded as they did.<\/li>\n<li>Sometimes we do a good job of showing a character&#8217;s response, then wimp out, feeling the need to reiterate <em>why<\/em> the character responded as he did&#8211;showing AND telling. No, no, no. Trust the reader.<\/li>\n<li>Whenever we explain, there we are (voice of God), elbowing our way into the story. When we do that, Hill says, we are &#8220;using real-world explanations for fictional-world events.&#8221; That destroys the story&#8217;s fictional reality. As John Gardner would say, it jolts the reader awake from &#8220;the fictional dream.&#8221;<\/li>\n<li>Unnecessary explanations need not be page-length, paragraph-length, or even sentence-length. They can be one or two insidious words. Hill&#8217;s examples include &#8220;Timothy hollered in pain.&#8221; Unless the point-of-view character is Timothy or unless she has ESP, she doesn&#8217;t know that Timothy hollered <em>in pain<\/em><em>. <\/em>We can just say a character hollered or frowned or wept and trust the reader to figure out why, given the circumstances. (No &#8220;Angela wept <em>as if the tragedy of the situation just settled on her&#8221; <\/em>either. That&#8217;s still point-of-view character speculation.)<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p><em>The second part of this summary will appear Monday, June 27<\/em>.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>When I read a vivid description of a particular disease or condition, I confess I start feeling a slight pain in the target spot, an itch, a touch of malaise, a sink of nausea. 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